Comments on: TOE Short Story :: jayykayy [Internet Safety] – Part 3 http://theopenend.com/testv2/2009/07/25/toe-short-story-jayykayy-internet-safety-part-3/ Sat, 19 Sep 2009 22:52:51 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.8.4 hourly 1 By: herocious http://theopenend.com/testv2/2009/07/25/toe-short-story-jayykayy-internet-safety-part-3/comment-page-1/#comment-12373 herocious Mon, 27 Jul 2009 22:06:03 +0000 http://theopenend.com/?p=8381#comment-12373 <p style="text-align: justify;">You have me trying to guess already: is Mace like the man in the picture of this post, or is Mace really a pretty brown haired girl with light freckles and dark brown eyes? <p style="text-align: justify;">I like the way you included the detail about a dog in Macelyn's pic - "A dog smiled happily below her." That sentence reads well as a standalone.

You have me trying to guess already: is Mace like the man in the picture of this post, or is Mace really a pretty brown haired girl with light freckles and dark brown eyes?

I like the way you included the detail about a dog in Macelyn’s pic – “A dog smiled happily below her.”

That sentence reads well as a standalone.

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